Poem I wrote!!! Please comment and criticize if must!!!!?

Question

I had written this poem over 1 month ago, and wanted to get some feedback on it again.

I wrote this because i "HATE", when people postpone or make later arrangments continously, with no intention in ever starting or finishing a project or similar to that. In other words, lazy people go no where in life.

Your lies and procrastination mean nothing to me

Your dreams and fantasy’s will never ever be

Your thought’s and passions are only to make

Your determinism and realism is only a fake

Your view of dreams is walking through maces

While my view of dreams is going to places.

Answer 1

this poem is very good about describing your inner feelings, it comes off has very negative but powerful

Answer 2

it really hits the core, as if I were you and I could fully understand it.

well done, and I encourage you to write more. you have talent.

the words you use, make other people go in deep thought.

thats all that matters.

Answer 3

it really proves your point in a powerful way. nice job