Poem I wrote a few months ago This was, according to my best critic, my breakthrough poem.?

Question

The ones I've posted previously to this came after this one.

Your Grandfather

Part 1: Curiosity

“Mother, why does grandfather stare so? Why does he not answer us when we speak? Why does he always seem so ...gone?”

Part 2: His Journey

You see sometimes he looks amiss

And times he seems to reminisce

Know now, my dear, he dreams of days

Before a single hair was gray

The war was raging

And men were dying

Soft and sweet

The young boy’s heart

Still beat in peace

Unaware of all that dark

First went his father, then his brother

Out to war they weren’t even together

Then sister dear and then his mother

Influenza seemed to last forever

Left alone, he’s still as stone

The one to stay, the one to bleed

Hate’s seed will soon become a weed

As hope bleeds, now is gone

Answer 1

Beautiful.

Answer 2

That was amazing. I can feel how the people around him are feeling on the inside. I can see the hurt and pain they feel when it comes to all he's gone through. It was touching. I think that you should save that so when you get into higher grades, if you ever have a project about WWI you have a little extra something to add to it. Teachers like it when you go above and beyond. It's truly a touching, great, lovely poem. Good job.