Poem - If A Heart Could Speak?

Question

If A Heart Could Speak

There is something within

This cold façade

Behind the walls

Old and barred

Hidden in the darkness

Cloaked by the shadow

I am not seen

A secret

A burden

A hope

A dream

Locked away

Out of view

I am waiting

To be born anew

I remain imprisoned

Only you have the key

You only need to turn the lock

And set me truly free

You alone

A pure white dove

A savior

My one true love

Reveal it all

Show me the light

Know the secret

Hold it tight

Save me

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Answer 1

VERY interesting.

Popo enjoyed the use of contrast and the different elements of this poem.

Great work, keep it up.

Please take the time to answer Popo's thought provoking question.

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Answer 2

Omg!

i love it :)

Answer 3

I LOVE IT

very good  

Answer 4

Absolutly beautiful do not change a word. it captures you right from the start and lwheels you in until your caught.  Like a fisherman catching a fish. Great job!!!! keep writing it is amazing you have great potential....

Answer 5

I read a lot of poems on this website and I have never felt so compelled to answer! This is just amazing. It is absolutely beautiful, honestly.