Poem. Tell me what you think?

Question

I made it kinda fast, but yea. Tell me what you think please :)

Same old story

Same old rhyme

Same old person

One more time.

You’re drunk again

You don’t even know

I’m scared again

But try not to show.

It starts out fine

Then you start to yell

You cross a line

And it turns to h**l.

You come in

I try to leave

You scream come back

And pull my sleeve.

I say no

But you don’t let go

I say go away

But you’re here to stay.

You start to pound

I fall to the ground

You call me lame

As if it was a game.

You call me more

And I soak it in

You’re the *****

But you always win.

You’re drunk again

Your times run out

I’ve given up

Now I’m ready to shout.

Answer 1

i like it, but the rhyme scheme keeps changing.  it goes from ABAB to AABB, and back again, just straighten that out, and it is very good

Answer 2

I like the first two stanzas, personally.

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Answer 3

in my opinion i like it.