Poem critique please! For the beginning of a story, has to be good!?

Question

It takes two to comfort

It takes time to console

If only I could find myself

Then I would be whole

Hiding from a stranger

Pretending just to please

Finally I lost myself

The mirror’s just a tease

And then upon my thinking

The answer did resound

It’s not so much I lost myself

Just needed to be found

Answer 1

WONDERFUL!  The rhythm, the point crystal clear, not forced, beautifully presented, it's simply wonderful.

Answer 2

Wow, what an inspiring poem. Did you wrote that? Agatha or Miss, I think... No I believe, you'll become a well-know poet someday.... It's nice how you started out lost inside yourself, but in the end, what you really needed what just to be found...

Here's my poem:

Life gives us trials

but we always seem to prevail

cause only with those trials

Will we only sees to avail.

Answer 3

That was EXCELLENT!!! It all blends together and make perfect sense. I Love It!!!!!!!!!

Answer 4

this is truly wonderful. i love the whole concept of not knowing who you are and feel that you are incomplete. love it.

Answer 5

i loveed it!

simply amazing. your poems are not to compare to mine:(

haha. well anyways if want to check them out. they are posted in my questions:P