Poem..critque...Thanks?

Question

In the hours before my deathbed,

I will probably make amends.

With God and all my lost friends.

But these things inside my head,

They feed on my misery.

So as I take my last breath

I will probably speak,

But my tongue is now to weak,

And it's clear for anyone to see,

I hate my own misery.

Thinking about happiness, well I cannot see,

Maybe it's this sadness taking over me.

I peel my eyelids from my eyes,

Just to see if I can see inside...

I'm a fake!

In the minutes before I let go,

I'll try not to pretend,

That this is how I wanted it to end,

Theres just one thing to know,

I'm a mess

So I hide behind my poetry

And all these ******* books I read,

Mean nothing to me, they mean nothing to me.

And I pick apart all your problems,

but I don't care to see mine,

I'm a wreck which has no face..or time.

So I said that I would learn to love,

Well Loves got no time for me,

So I'll just say this one last time...everythings fine.

I can lie so well

It's not emo mk...its feelings! Thanks

Answer 1

Its good but a bit depressing

Answer 2

good

Answer 3

it's good to read poems that reflects true human heart..thumbs up! but it could have been better if you're going to include the title..

Answer 4

really great, good to know you can express yourself when you're feeling a lot,  word to the emo thing, but fix yer grammar boii.

Answer 5

great :)

i love your work,and i can relate some parts of my life to it

i love your work!!♥