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Poem for my best friend (opinions needed)?

by Guest10645  |  earlier

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My best friend and I both had a really rough year, but I helped him and he helped me and we're tighter than ever. I wrote this poem to give to him for his brithday, but I'm wondering if it sounds too mushy. I'm not in love with him or anything, so I don't want him to get the wrong idea.

Rhyme pattern aabc, syllable count 6664 (some variation).

If I leave here ever,

If I come back never,

I will know that somewhere

I have a friend.

A friend that's all mine

A friend that helps me shine

Patient as ever when

I need some help.

If I leave here ever,

If I come back never,

I will know that somewhere

I have a friend.

You insult and I tease

We do whatever we please

But after everything,

I hope you know...

If you leave here ever,

If you come back never,

You can know that somewhere

You have a friend.

Through all of life's harsh years,

Through the smiles and the tears,

Remember that somewhere

You have a friend.

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  1. awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww :)

    thats so cute!

    answer mineeeeeeee. :)

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