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Dead Reckoning

Windward Bound

On the foggiest of morns

Coastal crash echoing to port

Hopes beacon piercing through the darkness

Sultry shadows ripple from wakes edge

Ahead lay etched cliff walls

Fractured slivers scattered below

Coastline encased in granite mask

Infinite aquatic foe pummels on

Ceasing for none this enduring quest

Lays in wait clueless victims

Mindful merchants plying their trades

Toss the dice by timekeeper rules

Helpless heroes transformed to merciful souls

Strewn about in their watery tombs

Hard to starboard full ahead

Seek safe harbor mind the birds’ eye

Watchful weathermen respect the dawn

Each day offering tomorrows history

Traceless travelers preserve youthful rights

We are mere pawns in nature’s game

Tread lightly when you leave lands end

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Answer 1

This is pretty good. For me, it seems more of a vocabulary exercise. I have spent all of 2008 taking out the unimportant words.

I lived on the ocean and in boats most of my formative years and young adulthood. I should taste the salt with one drop....wait...didn't I just write about that drop a minute ago?

Answer 2

The imagery is outstanding! You have captured the sea perfectly. Your last two lines...I love them!

Answer 3

You have totally captured the devastating power of the sea. "Hope's beacon", "tomorrow's history"  and "traceless travellers" are just some of the exquisite images that grace this poem. This is quite frightening but very beautiful.  Thank you.

Answer 4

I live on an island.  The sea and I are intimate, so I know all his moods.  You have described them very well.

Answer 5

Love it. Peace.

Answer 6

cool

Answer 7

Powerful, intriguing beauty of warning.