Poem..give some input?

Question

Will you be?

the one to make me smile?

will you be?

the one i can come home to?

will you be?

the one i can call my cuddlebug?

will you be the on?

i can call me own?

will you be?

the one i can wake up next to?

will you be there for me when i need you?

Don't promise me everything

then leave me in the dark.

Be my everything

Be my light

Be my Confidence

Be my Best friend..

BmM

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Answer 1

It is nice and all, but I don't see any new ideas...it seems like a bunch of stuff I have read before.  You need to really pull out your personal emotions and put them on the page...this is a good start though.

Answer 2

good poem ,,,check the 8th line instead of me you can write MY       rest is good &original let it be the same.............. decided a name if not it can be " WILL YOU BE" as it has been used often in the poem  ......................you hav written a good poem

Answer 3

Sounds like a love poem but I think it's good and it looks like you put a lot of time into it.

Answer 4

It is a good poem.

You make your point and do it within the realms of poetry.

Keep wriying..............

Answer 5

omg that is beutiful is it for a special some one:}

lol

xox(hugs)

Answer 6

Briana, that was a very beautiful poem, try it without the question marks and that could be the style of the poem.  Who is he?