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i am in a poetry slam (elite 8) and i am going against a person with a really good person! ok so i am writing a powm about all the"stupid girls" i want to make it really really funny! please help make it funnier! thanks!

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Stupid girls

There they are on the front of the magazines

All of them total drama queens

The stupid girls going to rehab

They’ll just stick it on their tab

Doing community service

Making they’re agents oh so nervous

Jamie Lynn pregnant at sixteen

Its all over the t.v screen

Her older sister , what a mess

Shaving her head with success

dumb girls doing what they want

Their stupidness they will flaunt

Paris Hilton can you say “dumb blonde”

Her life is all wrong

Lindsey Lohan passed out

Drugs she can’t live without

Vanessa sending pictures, so bad

Fame, she thought she had

These girls need the attention

Need I not mention

THEY’RE STUPID GIRLS

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Answer 1

why start at stupid

Answer 2

Hi IQ's not accepted.

Fame and trash is their ID.

Stupid Girls are....

Nothing -Like -Me!!!

Answer 3

I'm sorry... but I don't find humor in this.  Part of the social problem is that there is no compassion.  Whoever lives in glasshouses should not throw stones!!  "Meaning" no one out here is perfect- laughing at someone else's expense is not humor. Funny should = humor.

Answer 4

I like it a lot. It's not funny though, its a good observation of society.

You could turn it around at the end like

"stupid girls, reading magazines

gossiping 'bout celebrity drama queens

supporting a suicidal industry

destroying young girls when they hit their teens

stupid girls like me."

Answer 5

stupid girls are stupid

Answer 6

LOL I THINK ITS FINE BUT WERE IT SAYS " SHAVING HER HEAD WITH SUCCESS" IT SHOULD SAY SHAVING HER HEAD WAS A SUCCESS... BUT GOOD