Poem (please rate)?

Question

You say he’s not good enough,

And you tell me we can do better.

His heart isn’t big enough,

To fit a family in there.

He tried to change.

And he simply couldn’t stop.

But he’s my dad

and you never let him talk.

Was it the way he looked at you,

When you gave him all your c**p.

Or the way he glared at you,

When you turned your back?

Don’t you see, what you did,

To drive him away?

You say he’s not good enough.

But you didn’t ask him to stay.

I wrote this for my 8th grade writing class and I wanted to see what people would think and rate it. Please write everything you thought about it!!!!! Thanks xD

Answer 1

I LOVE it!!!

Answer 2

WoW this is awesome its the best poem ive ever read lol =0

good work =]

Answer 3

that is so awesome.  i think that would be amazing

Answer 4

i dont think its a poem unless it rhymes

Answer 5

I like it!!! I think it really describes boys! PUBLISH IT!!!!

Answer 6

As long as its from the heart cool, remember you don't write poems to be scored or rated, we read poems to get a better understanding of you. (keep writing)

Answer 7

F-

Answer 8

Its good, i write peotry as well and im only 14(No im not a fan of english and im not A++ in it, im really bad at english)

but with some more practise you could of made it better, some more adjects a bit more, imagary could of been used as well, o i sound like a english teacher :) keep up the good work

if you want to do it better,

www.allpoetry.com is a good website to show people your work and they also have some good courses for you to do as well :]

Answer 9

First the description

It talks about criticism

or being perfect

because of the lines

you say he's not good enough

and can do better

This is not a perfect world

but all one can do is their best

One gets better with either experience

or practice

depending what is being attained.

The lines don't you see what you did

that is put the person down or insult

The line after You say he's not good enough

I would have said

( tell me what is good enough )

Answer 10

This is a very good poem its deep but straight forward, that is how I like to write also. You do have great talent, keep writing. On a scale of 1-10 I would rate this about a 7 or 8. Maybe if you get a chance you can take a look at some of my poems on my myspace blog: http://blog.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseac...

I would appreciate it it :]

Answer 11

I love it. Bloody brilliant...thank you for sharing!

7/10