Poem???????????

Question

this poem seems unfinnished between the second and third paragragph i think ill add another one so far it has a title but the title is still undecided i would like it very much for you to read my poem and think of a title based on the way you unterperet it to mean and one you see fitting for it .

(hearts of the lost shadow)

Beneath the shadows in the dead of night,

There is a place where dreams arent always right,

Beside the echoes are thoughts to tear,

Inside these thoughts lie her heartbreaking stare,

Striking while your down and out,

Knowing that you'll never doubt,

Her love for you was truly real,

The shock in your eyes is hers to steal,

As your life borders to the start of its end,

She realizes now there's no need to pretend,

One last breath before she strikes again,

silent screams, she cannot explain.

Anything left is yours to keep,

Nothing but the sound of eternal sleep,

Now she has got what she forever wanted,

No longer is he permanently haunted

Answer 1

I love your poem. I'm sending you one that I love too.

Friends a poem by

William Butler Yeats





Now must I these three praise

Three women that have wrought

What joy is in my days:

One because no thought,

Nor those unpassing cares,

No, not in these fifteen

Many-times-troubled years,

Could ever come between

Mind and delighted mind;

And one because her hand

Had strength that could unbind

What none can understand,

What none can have and thrive,

Youth's dreamy load, till she

So changed me that I live

Labouring in ecstasy.

And what of her that took

All till my youth was gone

With scarce a pitying look?

How could I praise that one?

When day begins to break

I count my good and bad,

Being wakeful for her sake,

Remembering what she had,

What eagle look still shows,

While up from my heart's root

So great a sweetness flows

I shake from head to foot.

Keep your light bright!♥

Answer 2

this seems more like song lyrics than straight poetry. add in a chorus, copyright it, and try to get it sold.

Answer 3

i enjoy your poems-this one to