Poem: "Spark". Comments?

Question

In the old days lighting a fire

Was a momentous decision

Collecting wood and dry tinder

Was a ritual of precision.

The spark when it came was precious

And vulnerable to wind and rain

To be well guarded and nurtured

For the chance rarely came again.

Was it like that with lovers too?

In times gone by did we show care?

Did we load the spark with value

And treat love as something so rare?

These days a flame is commonplace

It's not like asking for the moon

We shrug if the fire is extinguished:

"There'll be another one soon."

Answer 1

It is kinda blur, at a moment cause we don't easily note what you are talking about but then, it gets better and better. to sum it up, it really is good. good job, keep it up. check out my poems please and tell me what you think.

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Answer 2

Fourth stanza, second line, final word. (Of my poem, about yours.) Says it all. (And the rhythm is inconsistent. Discipline, please.)

You're right, I am in the minority...of people who know a poem when they see one. You're obviously in the majority...of talentless hacks who frequent this site.

Believe me, it means something to those named in the poem. You try writing something that's worth reading. It's a nice idea, but less than ably executed. My poem has a more specific (and narrower) target...and it hit the bullseye.

The target may be narrow, but it is long, and watching. Who do you think gave the thumbs up to the remarks you left for my poem, but did not leave any of their own? Not so strange, after all.

And it takes great skill to hit the bullseye on a narrow target.

And as you mentioned ryhme on my posting, strictly speaking, 'again' (in your poem) is usually pronounced 'agen', so doesn't quite rhyme with 'rain'. However, I was allowing for poetic licence. Your move...do keep up.

Answer 3

Another well thought reality is written. Love it!!

Answer 4

This is a delightful piece of work - I sums up the way that even in our relationships this is a throw away society.  I think it works really well.  Thanks for sharing it.