Poem written for friend that died of cancer?

Question

the days we used to play

until one day

you werent at school

you didnt call

asking my mom whats wrong

she says nothing honey

but one day i woke up

and my mom explained

that you were gone

i cryed still in shock

that you were gone

to my bestfriend whoo died of lukiemia 5 years ago <3

did u like it?

Answer 1

i&#039;m sure you&#039;re friend looks down from above and smiles for he/she is blessed with a friend like you...

Answer 2

A beautiful heart felt sentiment and testimony to your friend.  God Bless You!

Answer 3

that is a good poem. so sorry to hear about your loss.

Answer 4

First of all, I&#039;m sorry for your loss. I really like the poem even though to some it may be simple. Not all poems have to be long with endless metaphors and complex personifications. Good job showing the tone of the poem. I liked that I could flow through it easily without having to unnecessarily pause. The only tiny thing that needs improvement was at the end when you repeated &quot;that you were gone&quot;. It seems you tried to lengthen the poem, but remember, doesn&#039;t have to be huge to be good and have meaning

Answer 5

The fact that you still feel the great loss shows in your work.   It is very sad that no one told you what was going on because you would have been prepared and had closure.

Good poem.  Use a spell checker and don&#039;t forget the apostrophes in words such as didn&#039;t. Doing so improves your poetry far more than you can imagine.

T.

Answer 6

Man, I almost started crying. That is a powerful poem, and I&#039;m glad someone on this website gets it. Overwritten poems are cliche, and freeverse is in. You should enter this into a contest. Look in magazines which publish original poems and short stories this poem is great.

Sorry about your friend, but I can relate, but my friend didn&#039;t die from cancer. He was murdered, by his own mother. We were eight at the time, he was my best friend. To this day I miss our days of friendship.