Poem(not about me) What do you think???

Question

I sit here.

I know my guilt.

I know I'm wrong.

I know that this chair could tilt,

Leaving me on my face.

I know what they felt.

I know what you feel.

I know that I sit here.

I know I probably won't leave.

This isn't just one of my famous peevs.

I shouldn't have said it.

I shouldn't have put my heart on my sleeve.

I shouldn't have did it.

I shouldn't have told you.

Now you haunt my every step.

My every thought.

My every breath.

You don't know where I am.

You don't know why I did it.

But now I sit here.

And my guilt is rising.

And I've told you that I know.

So....

Now I sit here.

Feeling what you said I would:

....Fear.

And tears streaming down my face.

And knowing if I saw you, you would know my case.

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This isn't about me if you're wondering. It was totally random and spontaneous poetry.

Critics please?

Answer 1

sounds like someone on the electric chair.....

Answer 2

its super good but the line that says i shouldn't have did it should be i shouldn't havedone it! =]

Answer 3

I would change nothing (except the grammar mentioned above).

There's something mysteriously alluring about this free-hand poetry....I have seen very few good poems of this kind. Yours is one of them!

Good job!