Poems are not my thing...Please read though, just for a laugh!?

Question

Powerless anxiety and dread appear

I don't want to live my life right here

I don't want to spend my life in fear

When reality speaks

I can't focus on what could be

If you will never be with me...

Yes I know horrible...but its my first time so yeah...

Answer 1

It's not that bad. Try making more stanzas from that one and think of a refrain.

Answer 2

keep it up!!!good START!!!!

Answer 3

IT SOUNDS LIKE THE BEGINNING OF A SONG....

Answer 4

not bad for a beginner. an easier poem to start off with is Haiku.

                                           5 Sylables

                                           7

                                           5

EX. Darkness fills the room

       Outside the sun is shining

        My heart is dieing

(wrote it myself)

Answer 5

It is not a comedy type of write, it isn't actually bad at all, just depressing, but nerveless good!  It is short, to the point, like I said  not bad at all, actually pretty good! Try another maybe this time something a little happier,and up beat!  Cheers!!!