Poems i wrote, opinions? tell me what you think?

Question

here are a few poems i wrote.

any advice??? cos im only 15 so i would be grateful.

1

Let me tell you April, we must work closely

You may have defeated the previous chill

But a heat in the distance comes quickly

Do all in your might to stand your ground

Watch! The enemy comes

In both directions

Lets make sure you last another round

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2

There's a crow by the window

Taps its beak on the glass

I could only see as far as the street lamps

As its silhouette flew away fast

The shadow laces the brick walls

Lets out a deafening cry

Flew away and gone forever to freedom

In the directions of the heaven high.

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3

An Autumn breeze

Gently tosses the fallen leaves

And the grass and sun and sky

Are pure and bright

And if you were to show me a cloud

I'd never believe my eyes

And tell myself I lost my sight

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Answer 1

i like it is wonderful if famous poet i will buy ur book.

Answer 2

I think the first one is the best because they could dissect it and analyze it for meaning in school.

Answer 3

wow, not bad, good job keep it up! I used to be like that, infact i still have my journals I used to write in, I use those for music now... your doing great though, dont stop...

Answer 4

hey, i like the first one the best.  The other two are about common things; the way you made the first one, was very unique.  I like the technique, and the dude's right, it could be analyzed in school.   =)