Poetryy.. kind of sad.

Question

Please excuse the dramatics...

I wrote this in 2002 when i was 12.

Just lookin for some feedback. =)

as i hold the steel knife inches above my vein

i know that within minutes, i will lose all pain

i'll cut myself deeper this time,

committing my crime...

for you have hurt me more than necessary

i have held much more than i can carry

you never knew how much you meant to me

and now that i'm gone i hope you will see

for you are the reason i am holding this knife

i hope you hear my piercing screams

i hope you see me in your dreams

i hope this guilt gets engraved in your heart

i hope when you find out, it tears you apart

for all you have done to me, you don't deserve less

the pain you'll get will give me happiness

i feel the knife go down straight

i know that the blood represents my hate

now that my walls are caving in on me

you're the only person i'm going to see

you're my first and last true love

and you're the only one i'll be thinking of

Answer 1

12 years old, commiting suicide cuz of love?

not cool.

Answer 2

Despite the fact of Absolute Terror it conveyed in me....... I though it was quite good!  

Answer 3

welll, i would believe it is not about you if you write one that is...