My earlier post was this one :
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Au1Zs6udeSiYHlueiby6xoDsy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20080717174516AAWC4wx
Computer's Lie of eye
Much information
a small device
The ligh beckons me
Drawn, hypnotize,addicted
This Machine a best friend
A comforter, release of burden
Click of a switch,push of a button
Engulfed by its intrigue
Friend turned enemy
Time plus attention
Weighed down neglected work
The nagging pulling need
My energy surrendering
To this controling force
Something screems out
Light dims into nothingness
I am hoping this is better please be honest and tell me what you think ! Compare the two of them and how can I make it better? Thanks so much!!!
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