Q:Any incorrect words in this writing? Thank you~~?

Question

Q:

In some countries government put industries and business from big city to regional area or rural area. Discuss disadvantages and advantages.

answer: Para1

It is not strange that the majority of businesses will choose to work in the centre of modern cities. In this case, time will be saved and efficiency will be enhanced, which is beneficial to development of the enterprise and the city. However, in recent period, policies and laws are released to move businesses from cities to rural areas, which is a controversial issue among the experts.

Answer 1

it is a very good writing, but a person will be easily bored if reading a long paragraph. it would be best to

Make it shorter.

"It is not strange that the most businesses will choose to work in the center of modern cities. In this case, time will be saved and efficiency will be enhanced, which benefits the enterprise and the city. However, recent policies and laws are released to move businesses from cities to rural areas"

words like "a controversial issue among the experts" means nothing. it is unspecific.

as for incorrect grammar, copy paste it into microsoft word or any program with a spell ad grammar checker.  

Answer 2

It is not strange that the majority of businesses choose to work in the centre of modern cities. By doing so, their time will be saved and efficiency will be enhanced, which is beneficial to development of the enterprise and the city. However, in the recent period, policies and laws have been released to move businesses from cities to rural areas, causing controversy amongst all.

Answer 3

i found following mistakes:

1) business- buisness

2) area- areas

3) business again

4) beneficial to THE development

5) enterprises

6)busines again

hope this wot u wanted