Question for stories I write?!?

Question

Okay, so, one of the characters likes this guy, and she doesn't admit it anytime in the stories but the reader can tell she likes him. She doesn't act like a total spazz in front of him, but you can still tell she has a crush on him by the way she acts. She's a real cool calm collected person, and like I said, doesn't act like a spazz around him but does have a little different body language. So what should she do that would tip the readers off that she likes him? Like body language, differences in how she talks to him vs how she talks to other guys.

Answer 1

She sounds a little like me. In that case, I would either be a little shyer around him than around other people (if we don't know each other well) or pick on him and play little tricks and pranks on him (if we're already buddies).

Answer 2

So is it supposed to be obvious to the reader, or foreshadowing?

Answer 3

Well it depends greatly on a lot of details you haven't given us. Whose point of view is this book from? First person? Third person omniscient? Also we have no idea what the setting is or what the character roles are. Are they kiddies in preschool or hunters in an indian tribe or aliens from Planet Xerox? Nobody can really answer this question correctly without knowing a bit more, sorry.

Answer 4

well, speaking form personal experience, it happens quite often that when girls like guys they go back to their grade-school selves. They'll probably be really mean and sarcastic around them, and probably feel guilty about it later but they'll do it anyway. Also, they'll likely complain about this guy A LOT with their friends, and their friends will probably make jokes about how she actually does like him. And she would probably find any excuse to be around him, and try to make up a reason for why she HAS to be there.

As for body language, touching his arm, looking at his lips when he talks, etc.

I hope this helps, and good luck with your stories!

Answer 5

So why not have her suddenly become spastic? (I object to spazz because I have a friend who suffers from spastic movements & he's had to deal w/ that word his entire life.  OK, end of lecture).

She could be walking down stairs @ school & sees him at the bottom opening his locker.  She freaks, misses a step, & starts to slide down the stairs hanging onto the bannister all the time.  All the kids are laughing because her notes are flying through the air, she makes  involuntary whooping sounds & skids to a stop in the hall.  He's looking at her incredulously so she says something like, "I nailed that routine, didn't I? Hope I can duplicate it in gym class.  Or "guess I'm not ready for the dance competition."

Lunchtime in the Cafeteria: She's wearing a regular blouse, couple buttons undone, but tasteful.  He's sitting at the next table, facing her.  She's so nervous she doesn't realize strands of spaghetti are falling off her fork, dropping down the blouse, & peaking up from her bra.

Young adults will identify w/ this.  They have vivid imagination & will be able to SEE what you describe.  Don't be timid, take a risk.  Think of the fun you could have imagining certain people in these kinds of situations.  Almost diabolical, wouldn't you say?

Answer 6

hi, i get what you say i'll probablysuggest changing the tone of the story when the girl sees the guy, describing any changes such as heartbeat and blushing and other stuff so you'll let ur readers know hoe she feels.-happy wwriting

Answer 7

Hm. That's a good question.

Body language wise, perhaps she only plays with her hair when she's around him. Or perhaps she's not so rigid in posture around him, versus being uptight and stiff around other guys. She could always smirk at him, in a flirty, yet subtle manner, and frown or roll her eyes at everyone else.

She could be "more herself" around this special guy, and talk to him in a comfortable sort of way. What if she could tell him things that she would never tell her friends or other guys. An example would be that she could tell him something silly, like she still sleeps with a stuffed elephant that she had when she was a kid, only to have him tell her something similar.

Her coyness could even be the cause of conflict for her. He could think she was only interested in friendship, when in fact she's interested in more but is too shy to outright say it.

Wow. I'm babbling, but at least I hope that will give some idea of how you can develop your main character.

An AWESOME book I use sometimes is called 'The Writers Digest Sourcebook for Building Believable Characters' by Marc McCutcheon. It's a neat book designed to give your character a little more personality, and has a thesaurus (of sorts) of words based on action, description, language, etc.

Answer 8

maybe you can especially focus on how she is upon seeing him, then before talking to him, then while doing so..

then maybe, just for the fun of it, add lines that she might be thinking of while talking to him..like maybe they are just having this normal conversation but her mind is going : Boy you have hot lips! or something. (if it wuld be appropriate) but that sure would be funny..=)

goodluck!