Ramadan section: is this good..?

Question

i know this has nothing to do with ramadan, but is this good enough to turn in. (homework-poem)

I am.

Family, religion, and Life.

I like helping others and setting goals for myself.

Honesty, Humor, and Kindness are important to me.

I find pride in myself when I achieve a goal.

I can be selfish when it comes to what I want,

But my friends and family show me that I should be more grateful for what I have.

I hate when people are fake.

I love having a big family.

I love being able to help others in need.

This is me, I am!

Answer 1

Its a great poem. I see you wrote about the family and life part but no mention of the religion part. i was expecting you to explain all three.

Only trying to help :) Great poem though.

Answer 2

its very  good sister

keep it up

Answer 3

That's really good!

and a good YOU!

Answer 4

salam to all...

its lovely but dont use the word " pride " satan has pride...

an also " hate " why hate...

leave avery thing in the hands of Allah tala

Answer 5

yea ur the best i love it keep it up they are great qualities

ramadan mubarack!!!

Answer 6

Thats so lovely, mashallah 3alayk. =)

Answer 7

Wow, it's nice, good job!

Answer 8

you seem exhibitionist..

@@ Dear MAryam,how could i answer your question dear..!! when i am blocked !

is following Quran Alone a SIN !

your amswer would be No it is not ,but not following Sunnah is ,,right ?

well then explain me what Sunnah means strictly according to Glorious Quran. plz ,,could you plz..plz..plz enlighten me with your answer about Sunnah in Glorious Quran ! Oh ! plz dont say where is Salat in Glorious Quran,, find it yourself,it is right there in Glorious Quran ,Absolutely Clear ,,  Absolutely

Answer 9

very good mashAllah =).

Peace.

Answer 10

wonderful :)

Answer 11

Yes i love that its very sweet!

Answer 12

I have no idea how to differentiate poetry from normal statements. Anyway, what u have written sounds lovely.

Just like Amallay said, it would be great to add a few lines about religion---or even ur love for ur homeland.