Rap about my childhood?

Question

You know i grew up in new orleans

You wouldn't imagine the **** that I've seen

My mama said to always follow my dreams

when i was going to Middle School

I wanted to fit in and be cool

so i smoked but it made me look like a fool

Then there was a n***a named james

I will always remember his name

That was the year i made my mother in shame

I started killing people and i was in a gang

My gun was always going off and my mama was scared of that thing

when my sister was tryin to learn how to sing

I needed to get a career

my dad wasn't supportive always drunk off beer

had to get a job in the closet sears

Im lucky that i lived with a roof over my head

those things i saw i wish i hadn't had

after college i was starting to get sad

I got really depressed

Now all you disbelievers are impressed......

Answer 1

aww thats your childhodd... im sorry

but you know that rap wat tight

you get a perfect score

Answer 2

another success man you need to make more raps, man im really impressed!!!

EDIT: Peace out and keep up the good work!!!

Answer 3

d**n you killed people? Well it's not easy growing up in the hood, everybody makes mistakes...

It's pretty good man, are you gonna record it?

EDIT: ight cool

Answer 4

I like the messages you have in your rhymes, but your rhyme scheme is too simple in my opinion.