Rape is something that continues to effect the victim forever. This is a poem I wrote to help. Is it good?

Question

ACT OF WAR

An act of war, hate, and frustration

Anger and violence through penetration.

The tears and screams go unheard.

If only they’d listen to the one little word

To re-live that night everyday

To be reminded of it in everyway

When you shower or when you shave

To yourself, you will always be a slave

Your emotions and your life begin to rattle

Every time you think of that horrible battle

You ask yourself, when will this end?

Where is a friend with a shoulder to lend?

This war has gone on and on for years

But is it really worth all of the tears?

Is it worth re-living the pain

Of the night that your childhood was slain

You wish to forgive, but refuse to forget

But sometimes you want nothing to do with it.

You never know how much life means

Until you are laying there listening to your own screams.

Afterwards, all you want is to die

But when it doesn’t work you wonder why

You try to start over, starting at the end

Finally looking forward to what’s just around the bend.

Know that you will always have your past

That’s exactly what it is, it doesn’t have to last.

It can never go away, it can never hide

Don’t wear it on your shoulder or have it by your side.

Rise up again and live like the sun

It wasn’t your fault and you don’t have to run

Forgive yourself for the little mistakes

You will then see what a difference it makes

You’ll look in the mirror and not shed a tear

You’ll live a great life without all the fear

Turn to your family or to a friend

That is the only way that this war will ever end.

Answer 1

really good. sad though, i kinda feel like crying. great job

Answer 2

yeh i like it, good work :)

Answer 3

I've never been the victim or the perpetrator, but after reading this I feel that I may understand.

Answer 4

Very good verse but it's not poetry.  I think that maybe no one can make a poem on Rape.

Answer 5

i enjoyed this poem

its a sad poem

i love this

you are very creative

i felt like crying

Answer 6

I like it. It's a poem I'd like to hear performed, and I think I'd prefer that to reading it. The anguish is clear. Please, if you ever get the chance, you should perform it. With the right emotion and flourish in every word, this can be a very powerful poem.

PS: It's "continues to affect", not "continues to "effect". Effect is the noun, affect is the verb.

Answer 7

Brilliant poem like it alot. Excellent job