Rate My Poetry? Not looking for compliments. Please be honest.?

Question

After it all,

Empty air leaked pain

I almost screamed to fill it.

Just weary of every ones inability to comfort me

Blood dripped silently

I let my last tears fall with it.

I left my emptiness behind.

Answer 1

I love you, Jacqui :).

Answer 2

Well I don't like it at all but I think you have potential though

Answer 3

Little short don't you think? However the little you do have sound good, but most readers will want more. People will also want to know a little about why. You sometime in shorter poem have to explain your feeling, but then again fitting that in right is a bit hard. Just put some in there to make the poem your own>                                                         I mainly don"t like this that just because it to short and just doesn"t explain enough>

Answer 4

IT DOES SOUND LIKE U LOST UR VIRGINITY JAC'S

<3 YOU

Answer 5

Not  very interesting.  Sounds as though someone lost their virginity???

Answer 6

I think you definitely have a lot to say, and probably some great emotion to express. But I am of the opinion that before someone can write quality free form poetry, one should experiment with more structured styles. Not necessarily rhyming, but with some kind of meter and pattern of rhythm.