Rate and fix this decklist I came up with? Yugioh?

Question

This is a fun deck who's win condition is attacking directly.

The mucus yolks and raging flame sprites are to attack directly

The relinquished is in here to remove threatening monsters while comboing with opti-camouflage armour to deal big damage. The other cards are either stall, helpers to deal damage, helpers to bring relinquished out, or draw power. My Body as a Shield is to protect from effects that would destroy a not yet powerful sprite, yolk, or relinquished.

Please R/F and LEAVE SUGGESTIONS.

If you think this deck is a 10/10, dont answer, because you obviously don't know what you are talking about.

Monsters 19

3 mucus yolk

3 raging flame sprite

1 sangan

1 spirit reaper

3 relinquished

3 Manju

2 Senju

2 Sonic Bird

1 Morphing Jar

Spells 17

3 Opti-camouflage armour

3 Black illusion ritual

3 Messenger of peace

1 LV limit area B

1 Swords of revealing

1 Monster Reborn

2 Mage Power

3 My body as a shield

Traps 4

3 Reckless Greed

1 Gravity bind

Answer 1

looks pretty good to me

Answer 2

you can only use relinquished once, though. unless the equipped monster is destroyed, so using him for removal is pointless, and yields 13 wasted slots (13 slots is not good enough to support a DARK ritual monster base, anyway, you need to commit 16 cards, minimum)

if you really want to neutralize monster threats, you need to kill some of the excess cards, and pack in removal

-3 relinquished

-3 black illusion ritual

-1 swords

-7 ritual tutors

+1 smashing ground

+3 bottomless trap hole

+3 offering to the doomed

+3 upstart goblin

+1 premature burial

+3 solemn judgement

otherwise, I think it's a nice, fun deck, and wish you best of luck with this, and if you want to go for an otk aspect, look at my skull servant/wight deck in my questions.

Answer 3

- senju

- sonic bird

+2 des lakuta (i think i misspelled it... anyway its like golem centry except for draw a card insted)

looks good but you probably will need more draw power to get out your cards and teh senju and sonic bird is not nesecary

Answer 4

7/10

I think you might need more traps.