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Question

In times like these there is a hurt

When words aren’t enough to stop the pain

There are endless tears of turmoil

And nothing that is said will stop the rain

Inside the confusion lurks an anger

That no words of sorrow may diffuse

Riding through this storm of grief

Any evident relief seems at refuse

Only time will heal the wounds

And liberate from unending despair

love and friendship will ease the anguish

your beloveds soul is in my prayer

Answer 1

In times like these there is  hurt

When words aren’t enough

to stop the pain

Theres endless tears of turmoil

And nothing that is said

will stop the rain

Inside the confusion lurks anger

That no words of

sorrow may diffuse

Riding through storms of grief

Any evident relief

seems to refuse

Only time will heal wounds

liberate unending despair

love and friendship eases the anguish

beloved souls

i pray

or something like that lol. sometimes you dont need to have more words init but you get the same idea. hope i helped. this poem is really good. keep writing!!

Answer 2

5/5. That was beautiful.

Answer 3

It's really beautiful

Answer 4

Try to use other words to say the same thing.  Take each word and phrase and substitue them with better words/phrases.  

Unlike many of the poems I read on this site, your's at least has a point, but it is not finished.  Couldn't you do better than "there is a hurt"?  Since it doesn't have to rhyme, couldn't you say something like "a wound exists" or "a pain persists" or "when hurting rules".  Something like that.  Take each line and study it, how could it be better?  Don't accept a line as done until you have tried it in many ways.