Rate me "Chemistry of love " ?

Question

Chemistry of Love

phase 1 : pre-Love

Pair of poles are attracted to each other

By some odd attraction force With no noticeable resistance

The more they get close..the more they are attached to each other

phase 2 : Critical state

when Both sides aren't sure of their tendency but still in tendency

the attraction Force is equal to repulsion Force

Suddenly

Both bodies are so close

Both pose

With no Pause

Both Overlook the imperfections in the other

they gather

phase 3 : Collision

After some time Collision Occurs..

Loss of heat undergoes..

Energy gap increased..

Still some considerable heat Content not loosed

some tendency..

some favourer..

some actions and reactions..

Some Chemistry..

Phase 4 : One Body

Mutual tendency is strongly developed

Max Trust is gained

Both poles Become one DiPole

with the very same goal

the Stronger chain they got..the longer they survive

the weaker Chain they got..the sooner they Come apart

Answer 1

super cool one!!!!

Answer 2

hehehe

i like it. it's a different way of looking at love, and i thought it made an interesting read.

notes:

1) last two lines..."they got" did you do this on purpose? it's bad grammar....should be "they have"

2) you've got some pretty random capitalisation going on...i shall assume there is a purpose to this but i can't see it atm (tho i was out late last night so could be me)

3) overall, i think it could (like all poems) use a little reworking. a first draft is not a finished poem. reread, rework, edit, cut bits out, put bits in, change words and phrases. there is potential, so polish this til it shines.

Answer 3

Different but over-all not bad!

Answer 4

ok. its not bad but a poem is supposed to be POETIC "mutual tendancy is strongly developed"(just picking a random line) is nto poetic at all.... its veryt imaginitive tho! points fo dat!

Answer 5

too technical