Rate my lyrics? is it worth it?

Question

chorus-

is it worth it,doing time behind bar over gettin fast money,

is it worth it,doin all types of sh.t to get my pockets chubby,//

is it worth it,nickle and dime'n it just to put that work in

is it worth it, is it worth it//

v1

money is on my mind, so now its time to figure out,

how im gunna do this and make it to a large amount//

how im gunna make it, the right way or the wrong,

selling blow in the streets or should i juss sell this song//

should i stand around and be a stick up kid,

or should i be a stockboy and lift boxes of sh.t//

inside i have this ill hunger for green.

now i thinking should i do it dirty or clean//

and now i got a lil brother so i should go clean

stop comin home high and do the right thing//

but the streets keep callin,waking me from my sleep

so i put my hand on my head like d**n its time to think//

chorus-

is it worth it,doing time behind bar over gettin fast money,

is it worth it,doin all types of sh.t to get my pockets chubby,//

is it worth it,nickle and dime'n it just to put that work in

is it worth it, is it worth it//

v2

times get hard,man it do be gettin tough,

hopin dat 1 day you'll be a diamond in the rough//

but at the same time

u thinkin bout fck dat,im bout hit da block and juss nickle and dime//

and why im still just wasting my time,

but a voice in me said "you do this you doing time//

so i bailed off,dropped the weight off ,

walked up the block and heard a car peel off//

it pulled up right next to me,

it was narcs lookin for dat extasy//

nothin on me, thanx to that voice .

now im thinkin bout movin the weight,juss listen for a voice//

man im a risk taker

aint nothin stoppin me from gettin paper//

fast money

you no we gotta eat lovely//

but im still thinkin to myself

is it worth it for me to juss do this to myself?//

chorus-

is it worth it,doing time behind bar over gettin fast money,

is it worth it,doin all types of sh.t to get my pockets chubby,//

is it worth it,nickle and dime'n it just to put that work in

is it worth it, is it worth it//

Answer 1

pretty good work on it a lil bit  when you done with dat get a beat and put on the internet ill download that

Answer 2

You need to have a better rhyme scheme.  A lot of people get caught up in just rhyming.  Use some multiples to spice it up because it is really generic and mediocre.  Anyone could come up with something like that.

Answer 3

stop readin after the first 2 lines it was wack as h**l it dont flow the words you using arent hip hop which tells me you are white not sayin white people cant rap but you cant  

Answer 4

BULLshit

Answer 5

Not bad.... Work on the verses a bit, but it's very good. The hook is dope, and the topic is appealing.

It's comin' along.

PS- Make it a little longer

Answer 6

Wtf is wrong wit u ppl dese lyrics are hot the topic the rhyming all dat ur just hating especially the dumb a** that answered first talkin about your white no you d**k wad he's not white even if he was white doesn't mean he wouldn't be able to rap you racist sh*t