Rate my poem please, it'll be a qiuckee !! ?

Question

i wrote this in december 10, 2006. 2 years ago when i was young, now i'm already 21. now please tell me what you think, before another 24 months sinks in time >,<

thanks !!

Dedicated to those who feel lost, know you're not alone.

A Poem (Hebrews 13:5)

Anger consumed within me,

Rage passed continually by.

A mixture of blue and red,

Blinding the dim light inside me.

Once the light was like a flaming torch,

Such a torch that can be compared to the sun.

But even the sun rests, the flames can be vanquished

Only the night was witnessed until the morning dawned.

I was created to love you.

This was the only purpose,

But I chose to reject you.

How foolish of me to compose.

Given many chances to accept,

Welcome the love higher than my mother,

I was in an asylum locked by my choice.

"No more!" I uttered.

A glowing door suddenly appeared,

"Who could it be?" I questioned.

It opened; a figure so bright glanced at the corner,

"My child, fear not," the figure mentioned.

I took his offering hand.

Richness of everlasting springs of water,

The right hand of infinite life.

We departed blissfully as He catered

"Do not sow any longer, for you are here with your Father,"

I began to weep as a baby weeps for his mother.

"My child, for you were once lost but now have been found."

A final tear inching below, the Devil will no longer bother.

Answer 1

I think that the poem is you trying to express how you feel when your lost and feel that there is nothing left you can do. the quote at the bottom is you being found. In all the poem is alightly confusing to someone who just glances at it. but you honestly shouldn&#039;t care what others think. All that should matter is that it expresses how you feel inside and that you like it. everyone sees things diffrently and this just happens to be how you see being lost.

Answer 2

kool real emotional and deep. Kool

Answer 3

I can&#039;t see the link between this poem and the quote from Hebrews. A lot of it I found purposefully confusing, choppy and maudlin. The conversion at the end is unconvincing and paraphrased.