Rate my poem thank you ;)?

Question

mmmkk here it is it was published by poetry.com =D

A young man once wished he could go back,

and fix the mistakes of his past,

To take back all he wished he had said,

And tell her he loved her instead,

but she left before he had a chance to say,

that he desperately needed her to stay,

there was so much he wanted to do with her,

so much that that he wanted to share,

she was his life,

through joy and through strife,

and then she was gone,

forevermore,

what did he have left to live for?

They told him time was money

Never settle for good

Always strive to be better

And always be the best

Soon he learned

that his mind would always yearn

for the illusion that blackened his heart

only to leave him in destruction

longing for more of the green seduction

I know its dumb of me to rhyme it but someone told me it sounded better with the rhyming

Answer 1

Its good : ) , it doesnt necessarily have to rhyme though!

Answer 2

I rated it witha star

Answer 3

oh that is so sad and beautiful at the same time! love it! 7 or 8 on scale of 1 to 10 :D

Answer 4

Toughtful I like it. As it reminds me of myself, and then the person who was who I left behind when he wanted me to say that I should feel that way.

So sad. I think he is a g*y now.

Answer 5

It's pretty good i could never do better.

Answer 6

kool

Answer 7

it is really good.

i can never do this, i always have a hard time writing poetry in school.

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 8

Not bad,sound more like a short story.

Answer 9

thanks for the comment and i made it all the way to the end so yes it was a good poem. you have a talent in writing.. you should check out the other one i posted up way earlier .. we got something in common with our writing on this one

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