Rate the poem I wrote?

Question

lucid dreaming

brings me life with meaning

as i lose my grip

reality begins to slip

awakening to the slap of a hand

exiting my dreary little dreamland

wondering what to do

does she goes through it too

obscene gestures

the thought still festers

dragging through the day

until i find another way

what do you think...honestly?!!

Answer 1

Honesly, it's soo cool! But it needs some more finishing touches. =D

Answer 2

Wow great job.  Keep up the good work!

Answer 3

good

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Answer 4

um neat and interesting

Answer 5

maybe 6 out of 10

Answer 6

look at it after you remove the first two lines.   much better right?

Answer 7

I think, a very good poem, yet so sad.

Answer 8

wow thats really good :D

Answer 9

I think its sweet!

Good job...

I will give 7.5/10

Its is a simple, right to the point, sweet poem!

Not much twist in it...

But I like it! Great job...

Answer 10

I think you have a  lot on your mind. Poetry is quite the creative outlet. I say I'm not going to give it a number or an amount of stars. Everyone has a different style.