Rate this amazing poem my friend wrote?

Question

My friend wrote this after he broke up with the girl of his dreams. Please comment on it and tell me what you think.

Somebody take me away from this darkness

Somebody take this from me

If anyone's out there

If anyone hears me

Somebody take this from me

I was beginning to think i'd lost my mind

Fell upon it hard and fell upon my hardest times

But the way she lit the room at night

Cast the shadows to their gloom and i

Still dream of your perfume

I would do anything to be with you

Edelweiss... angel why... comfort me

From so far away

Angel white... dream of mine... come for me

From so far away

Angel eyes... sweet love of mine... come back to me

Though so far away

Please don't cry

There's still time

I won't change

So far away

Please don't cry

I won't...

Answer 1

Some parts are song-lyric worthy! 9/10

Answer 2

wowee

that was, like you said amazing. i don't think you really need anyone to rate this for you to know how amazing it it.

Answer 3

d**n, where is the Kleenex.  Pain makes a great motivator.  He did good with this.

Answer 4

Your friend should write more.

This is a lovely piece with such sentiment.12/10

Answer 5

It could make a nice pop song, but it's far from the works of the great poets...

Answer 6

IT'S RELAY GOOD!!!!