Rate this from 1-10 and explain why?

Question

The pit in my heart fills with the sand from the empty desert of my dreams

Nothing but darkness in my world as far as the eye can see.

The pillars of my hope come crashing down,

destroying any chance of being found.

I wallow in my sorrow like a pathetic calf,

alone and unsure, pitied by all.

My life and spirit are all futile.

I have no other purpose than the target of ridicule.

I try and change things, try to make them better and nice

Only to have my efforts slashed as by a knife.

The pain I feel fills me with fear,

of never being able to leave or get out of here.

A dark hole filling with sand, trapped in the cascade of dirt from the land.

Slowly suffocating, never escaping,

no future foreseeable, no hope awaiting.....

Answer 1

5 dont know why

Answer 2

3 its so depressing. Lighten up, life aint that bad, and if it is you can always OD on paracetamol.

Answer 3

6. Not my style, really, but the idea of being buried alive is something that you should expand...

Talking about two important places -your head and your heart-being essentially empty...one a desert and the other a pit...is really pretty good.

You really should take that idea of being buried alive and write around just that. See how many metaphors you can come up with to express the idea of suffocation.