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MISTAKES ARE LEARNING EXPERIENCES

This is the story of a cycle which never ends

But I want to put a stop to it

I need to put a stop to it

I can’t let hate control me like it has controlled you

Because it has controlled you

Good intentions never for you again

Forget anything I ever said to you, for it doesn’t apply

[Chorus]

I couldn’t give a **** about you

Even if I dammn well wanted to

You’re the same as everyone else

Now go drown in a well

Surrounded in all your lies

I’ll push you over this cliff and say my goodbyes

And that’s just an example of how much I hate you

[Chorus]

How can a picture send you so far over the edge?

Don’t you know a picture may be worth a thousand words

But a thousand words is worth a million

Lets play follow the leader

I’ll follow your crowd

Live in my own hate

But I’ll love every moment

I’ll take your complaints

I’ll take all your h**l

But you wont get anything except for karma which will be a *****

Don’t play your words

You already had them made

Don’t play your words

You already had them made

[Chorus]

Don’t tell me what I am and what I’m not

I’m myself I think I would know

Don’t tell me what you think and what you don’t

Cuz either way I don’t give a ****

You’re the annoyance that just won’t go away

But I will even though Simon says to stay

I never thought I would know what hate was

Never thought I’d know the feeling

You proved me wrong

As you did about everything I could have ever believed about you

[Chorus]

I can’t even count how many times I’ve wrote the words I’m done

But this time true hate rises above nice and I can finally see though

I swear this is different from all the others and not just pretend

I’m annoyed, I’m frustrated, I’m jaded and this is the end

Tell me what you think please! Thanks! =]

Answer 1

o my god that is like amazing!!!!!!you should do this again!!!your really good!

Answer 2

Ok first of all, awesome lyrics!

But the technical aspect of it is, as structured as it looks, you need to stick to 1 chorus. In a song the chorus is the "CATCHY" part. So if you keep changing it, it doesn't really help to get your point across. The chorus is the most important part of your song, because most of the time is where you get the title and all that good stuff. So the only comment I have is keep your verses and make 1 chorus, then make a bridge that would take you into repeating the chorus 1 last time.

Keep writing you're good!

Answer 3

I think it has incredibly powerful lyrics, someone must have hurt you a lot but it is awesome

Answer 4

This is ******* awesome (: