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Rate this poem 1-10 and comment please?

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I know this is in the homeschool section...but you guys always give really good answers. I am homeschooled though.

WINTER HAS PASSED

The smell of spring fills the air,

There are wild flowers everywhere,

The wind blows softly through the meadow grass,

It whispers that winter has passed,

I was once here eight years before,

When I was free to run, to play and explore,

What happy times those were then,

Not a care, not a worry, life would soon begin,

So far away those times seem now,

Yet the years have passed, I don't see how,

The world was once a playhouse, built for me,

An enchanted kingdom, Of youth and peace,

Now I see the world for what it has always been,

A mixing pot, of ugly things,

Like hate and greed, lust and lies,

Happiness and hope lay down and die,

There is no purpose, no place to go,

Nothing left for me to know,

I will once more leave this quiet place,

This peaceful meadow, I once embraced,

My spirit has died, but I will live on,

Untill every last drop of hope is gone,

Hope in the future, to restore the past,

Those happy times that cannot last,

As the wind gently blows the meadow grass,

I know that winter has now passed.

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  1. 7.5 I know you worked hard on it some lines don't move fluidly.

    and your symbolizim is all wrong spring is a time for new hope, winter is what you discribe in your poem. I hope you don't take this wrong, but maybe you need to renew the happy times.


  2. 10.  Good times come and go, just as the bad come and go.  A star for you.

  3. i think its beautiful. of course you mention spring but thats to tell us that winter has passed. you can restore the past in your mind so yes i feel that is correct. It left me with a lovely feeling and i really liked it so well done and 10....I think you are saying the bad times are over.  winter has passed...very good...

  4. Go girl, this is very nice, sad but true. I rate it  8 out of 10.

  5. 10 out of 10.... *** *** *** ***

    You deseve it  !!  

    I feel that this poem summarizes the journey of life. Happiness is just an eposide in the drama of life.It always cherish fresh in our heart. Remembering our days of joy brings solace to our grief stricken mind...........

    Well written .....

  6. .... Minus 4 !

    This is why:  Hope in the future, to restore the past,

    The Past... CANNOT BE RESTORED....!

    When finding Rhymes... they have to Be LOGICAL....!

    "The Dinosaur a beast of yore..... Doesn't live here any More!".. Author Unknown!  From an 1959 publication.

    Thanks, RR

  7. 7-it's decent.

  8. 10

  9. 7/10

    It could use some work (it was a little shaky in parts, and there were some grammatical errors), but has a nice feel, and I think you really have some ability.  Thank you for your kind comments on my poem, and please check out my other questions.

    Best wishes

  10. 8.503166291940276

  11. 5 for effort.  The poem is confusing.  Spring symbolizes birth.  Yet you change it to mean ending your spirit.  You didn't have a smooth transaction when you suddenly appeared in the poem.

    Sorry 4 being truthful.

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