Rate this poem and give constructive criticism about it?

Question

I made this poem out of the blue since I need to kill some time. I don't think there's any meaning but if there has to be, I think it's about death.

The moon is swaying,

To and fro,

As we journey through,

The distant shadows of the past.

Days went passing by,

With the light going further,

Was it worth it?

Is this darkness with you too?

Answer 1

...I don't really get it much. I'm not sure how you can journey through something that is distant, or in the past for that matter, unless you are trying to get over the past. And the ending, is the darkness with me...I don't know, I'm not really getting much from that. Darkness and light, it's just sort of overdone.

If you can't find meaning in what you write, there's little chance that anyone else will.

Answer 2

i like t. i guess. i mean its not really my type of poetry. i also like it because i can see the image in my head, and i think thats really good when your writing this kind of poetry. i like the questions at the end. it makes the reader think. i am 13 so i dont really know how to critise it sorry.

Answer 3

change "of the past" to of tomorrow"and it will be like we re worried bout the future as days are going by and we re going into the future but if we re going into the future woring about the future the only thin to worriy bout is what we wasted in the past then there is no fun in our life so there is just darknes

Answer 4

Gee, I don't know what I can do for you.  If you don't know the meaning of your own poem, maybe I can give you some feedback that I don't know the meaning of.