Re-write this paragraph?

Question

As soon as I opened the window, the sight of grayish blue hills met my gaze, the sun gives a lustrous coating to both the nearby and distant peaks and to the clouds floating high and low. What a view of hills upon hills the sunshine has revealed! It that Lijiang river suffused with dim but glittering light.

Can you understand the means?

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Answer 1

The moment I opened the Window, my gaze fell upon the blue-gray hills. The sun beams a lustrous blanket covering the peaks both distant and far, as well as the billowing scattered clouds. Behold the view of hills upon hills the glowing sun has revealed! as the Lijang river is infused with softly shimmering light.

Answer 2

You have a conflict in tenses.  You have present tense in some sentences, past tense in others.  Also, is there a typo in the last sentence?  I'm assuming it's a question.

Here are two paragraphs with verb tense agreement.  The first in present tense, the second in past tense.  Tense should be consistent throughout.

1.      I OPEN the window and the sight of grayish blue hills MEETS my gaze.  The sun gives a lustrous coating to both the nearby and distant peaks and to the clouds floating high and low.  What a view of hills upon hills the sunshine has revealed!  Is that Lijiang river suffused with dim but glittering light?

2.     As soon as I opened the window, the sight of grayish blue hills met my gaze.  The sun GAVE a lustrous coating to both the nearby and distant peaks and to the clouds floating high and low.  What a view of hills upon hills the sunshine HAD revealed!  Is that Lijiang river suffused with dim but glittering light?

The first sentence of yours should be two sentences. In the second example, I think "... sunshine has revealed!" may still be OK the way you had it.

Answer 3

i opened the window and the sun about killed me.

you may have a little more talant than me..

Answer 4

Beautiful imagery. With your grammar, you need to be careful of run-on sentences, as well as changes in tense.

So here's how I think you can revise it:

"As soon as I opened the window, the sight of grayish-blue hills met my gaze. The sun gave a lustrous coating to the nearby and distant peaks, and to the clouds floating high and low. What a view of hills upon hills the sunshine revealed, with the Lijiang River suffused with dim but glittering light!"

Or...

"As soon as I opened the window, majestic grayish-blue hills met my gaze. The sun gave a lustrous coating to the nearby and distant peaks, and to the clouds floating high and low. What a view of hills upon hills the sunshine had revealed as it suffused the Lijiang River with dim but glittering light!"

Or something like that. I hope that is what you meant.

Answer 5

I understand what it means and I think this paragraph was beautifully written! I won't re-write it since the passage itself uses great literary elements to give the reader the image you are hoping to convey.

Are you writing a book?

Answer 6

As soon as I opened the window, I see the sight of the grayish blue hills; the sun gives a lustrous coating to both the nearby and distant peaks, and to the clouds floating high and low. What a view of endless hills upon hills the sunshine has revealed! It is the Lijiang river suffused with dim, yet glittering light.

Answer 7

Your views are wonderful, but your grammar needs improvement.  Try this:

As soon as I opened the window, the sight of grayish-blue hills met my gaze.  The sun gave a lustrous coating to both the nearby and the distant peaks, and to the clouds floating both high and low.  What a view of the hills was revealed by the sunshine!  (I can't decide what you mean by the last sentence.)