Read and comment my poem (is it contest material)?

Question

"far away sun"

he is my one love

his eyes captivate everyone he sees

yet he is above

me.but he doesnt love me

his hair is slighly messy

they say that he love no one

he is not very dressy

he is my far away sun

i dont exist to him

i am the slilent walker

i walk to the reyclyeing bin

i am not much of a talker

i try to be near

but yet he is my only fear

Answer 1

no higher then

the sun,

when it chooses

to fade,

  what makes

clouds is just

as thoughts

that build up

in too tears

thy heart is

young,

thy body moist,

thy heart

full of showers

in the summer

when it rains

stay forever

warm in thy sights

  come September *

thy SEA''pores,,

with SHELLS,,

BEYOND wander *

GO FIND  YOURS *

you will know

when you  see it *

ha,,funny.

peaces & cream *

  the sun just came out *

ha,,off i go,*

on another mission *

  fear thy light,, [never *

turn yourself,, [ on,*

Answer 2

take all your graet talent upsidedown Like how he is so nice and caring and gentely all of a sudden noticing you etc.....

Have more confidence in you

Answer 3

it's really good, full of emotion!

Answer 4

ya i like it

good job!!!

Answer 5

quite good, but don't enter any of your stuff in an online contest.