Read my poem please? :] (again)?

Question

I spend late nights thinking of you,

I wish that I didn't,

And it seems inadequate at times,

But you- you were the first man I ever knew,

The first person to hold my hand,

The first person I walked beside,

The first person to break my heart,

And the first person I ever missed,

Sometimes you were angry,

Sometimes you were mean,

But yes- I loved you anyway-the first man I ever knew,

You used me, abused me, left me, and hurt me,

But over the years I grew to accept you.

Through all the pain, the scars, and the lonsome years,

I forgive you,

I love you daddy,

The first man I ever knew.

Answer 1

Youre poem was good, but let me give you some suggestions:

           There are many styles of poetry, none of them better than the other. Some rhyme, while some of them just seem like essays with a rythym. Yet in the end it all matters on just taste. This poem however is very unique in its own way. i love the idea for youre poem yet i think i see more potential in it then the way you have it now.

         The way i see it, poetry is a form in which people are challenged to express their feelings creatively. This poem has the building blocks, but look deep inside you to describe these feelings. What type of pain have you experience for youre beloved dad? Does this compare to anything else? You need to draw the reader in to youre feelings because just saying youre sad and angry, doesent really give it that human emotion. Yet again, a poem is never finished, you can always add things in it. Youre poem was a good starter, but it could use some work.