Read my poem?

Question

I used to see you everywhere

Now you’re nowhere to be found

Maybe we could’ve started over

But how can I chase an elusive dream

Maybe you became invisible

A wish that didn’t really come true

I guess you’ve never liked me

And I’ve never loved you

Please tell me all your thoughts about it and if u could rate it that would be nice

Answer 1

ahh that's beautiful

Answer 2

I enjoyed your poem. I like the very minimal amount of rhyme at the end. Too often poems that use rhyme in every line sound a bit to sing/song. Using rhyme at the end gave it just a bit of a boost. I think you did a very clear job of giving insight to your feelings. I get a sense of a love lost, that was maybe never there to begin with. The only thing I would suggest is adding a bit more imagery to help paint a more vivid mental picture. Your poem does a wonderful job capturing a feeling. It's short and to the point and not at all redundant. I'd give it a 7 out of 10.

Answer 3

It's too talky. It needs clever wording so it could only be a poem and not a poem or dialogue.

56 out of 100.

Answer 4

omg, thats great.

you wrote that?

you should write more, i actually write songs:)