Read my poem??

Question

this is an awful draft!

it sounds so sad and bad, but i promise i'm pretty happy, and a much better writer, when given more time!

but i literally wrote it in 5 minutes.

i have nothing else to do!!

i made 2 of them!

:)

Oh but darling, you are so cliched.

Just a memory of the past,

Dangling at my finger tips.

I've got you and you know it.

Don't trip, oh please don't fall.

Because i don't know who will catch you this time.

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Like papercuts on plastic hearts,

you are the wound that heals all.

A time bomb ticking,

I never know when you're going to explode.

Your words cut deeper than the thorns of your heart.

We're only living to die.

But i swear, i gave it all for you.

Answer 1

i like it personally!

Answer 2

Esta excellente, excellent. i  just love it. i  have not heard a better poet than you. wish u the best poet.

Answer 3

Its not bad at all.I like it.

Answer 4

O my god  you are wonderfull i esspecally love the second one we're only living to die and the last line the the first one Because i don't know who will catch you this time

I fell you should remove the line and collabrate the 2 and even add a tune and make it a song it would be awesome!