Read my poem "Echo"?

Question

The title, obviously, is "Echo".

Call out, and I’ll call back to you.

Each word whispered softly.

Use your voice,

And a distant sound responds.

I bound from wall to wall,

Then fade into nothingness

Invisible,

Unable to say things of my own,

Unable to speak.

In the shadows,

In the light.

I am no one,

Yet here I am,

Hiding.

Without you, I cannot be.

Constructive criticism please. This means that if you are going to say you didn't like something, you have to tell me what I should write instead.

Nothing mean either. We all try our best, so one should not stomp on someone's efforts.

Thanks! ^_^

Answer 1

BRAVO! that was suppper good!

Answer 2

Your poem is rich with meaning and emotion. It is compelling and thoughtful, and indeed is making me think. It is succinct, which works well with the feelings it conveys. I really like it. I can't think of a way to improve it, but as always with poetry don't be afraid to change anything if you feel you should.

Answer 3

I believe in complete honesty when it comes to my opinion. If I didn't like it, I would go all Simon Cowell on you. In my opinion,  your poem is really excellent. Good enough to be published.

Answer 4

cool

Answer 5

I liked it keep up the good work

Answer 6

i'm soory I didnt like this one as much as the other.  this one it seems told me exactly what an echo was in figuritive language. i would like you to tell me what an echo isn't or what it could be.  Use the idea of an echo as a metaphor for your pain for ex., some kind of emotional feeling.  I'm sorry if i have disappointed you but for the person who wrote that other amazing poem I know that you can make this poem way better and more meaningful to everyone, and most important yourself.  Nobody else has to understand what your saying as long as it means something to you.  heck let them think.  that's the fun in poems- being mysterious.  otherwise with the whole echo idea i think you have a good idea to start an amazing poem.

Answer 7

love it!!! yay! *claps till hands are sore* yay! lol

its rly good though =^-^=

Answer 8

I think it's great!  Keep writing!

Answer 9

Fantastic poem and beautifully written ;)

I love the :

I am no one,

Yet here I am,

Hiding.

Without you, I cannot be.

well done!

Answer 10

Wow, that was very good, there is nothing like feeling the same emotion over and over again, like an echo, amazing how someone can feel like nothing and be where they want to be and their hiding they cannot enjoy their reward because once again, their without....amazing you're good, please keep it up :)

Answer 11

Wow, I actually really like that, it has a sad undertone, but yet is compelling. It's good. 8/10

<3

~an average girl