Read my story please?

Question

http://www.quizilla.com/stories/7570747/the-ocean-life--a-teenager-story-

can you please tell me if you like it, love it, needs improvement, hate it.

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Answer 1

Sounds mediocre so far.

You have all kinds of problems:

-Grammer

-Quotations

-Punctuation

-Capitalization

and the plot seems really cliche and used.

Try something different, a different plot. Try writing narratives first, then short stories, then longer stories and so on.