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Hi everyone!! Please tell me what you think of my poem!!! I'm 13 years old and I wrote my first real poem when I was 11. Thanks for you feedback!

Heartbeat

I weave myself into the nature’s pattern

I become a part of the unending rhythm

I give my heart

Give my soul

Give myself

To Nature

One voice

One heartbeat

The earth is alive

I whisper to the darkening skies

I listen to the water’s murmur

I share my secrets

Share my spirit

Share my love

With Nature

One voice

One heartbeat

The earth is alive

I smile as I look at the dancing stars

I feel life and dreams merging as one

I embrace the earth

Embrace the rhythm

Embrace myself

And nature embraces me

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  1. its really really good and that why you need to take it off now before someone copies it and says they wrote it.


  2. I think it's amazing for someone your age, trust me I'm a professional.  Your word choice is especially well done, I also like the placing of the stanzas.

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