Real Love Does Not Exist....(dark poem)?

Question

death is all around

it takes its toll

to bring us down

a gun to the head

can make you dead

but to the heart

ends all pain

if you miss

the pain still remains

don't care who I am

don't care where I've been

don't care where I'm going

just want to end the misery

pretending to be alive

only trying to survive

for someone other than me

real love does not exist.

I know its not a very nice poem. It was written years ago on a drunken depressed night. I recently came across it when going through some papers. No longer drunk or depressed. Putting it out there is kind of like therapy and showing myself how far I've come.

Answer 1

that was pretty g*y

just because words rhyme doesnt make it a poem

Answer 2

Interesting poem.

I don't really get how death and "real love" are related in the poem though.

Answer 3

Many people have felt the way your poem speaks. I also was one. I am happy to read you have brightened yourself! Life is good even when it can seem bad. Keep smiling!

Answer 4

Poetry can ease the pain or emotional turmoil..it is like journaling. I'm so happy you pulled yourself out of the doldrums :)

Answer 5

Its very powerful. and im sure this helped you out in the past so thats something good. But people that come out of these hard times become much stronger and experienced so use that to your advantage!!

Answer 6

hmm.. I find your poem very interesting

I say needs a Little editing though

I like it, it has a bit of truth to it... and then some view is skued

Answer 7

wow you need a oil cleaning

Answer 8

i love this poem! it sounds exactly how i feel

Answer 9

It's a pain felt poem.  What most posters didn't get was the fact that you were drunk and depressed when you wrote it.  

When someone is drunk and depressed, this usually does not produce their best work.  It does, however, produce honest work.  

Good luck with your therapy and over coming your demons. P!ss on the boneheads who didn't understand you weren't trying to promote your thoughts.  They were probably jealous they couldn't come up with anything as good while being sober! LOL

Answer 10

I've read some dark poems that I've actually liked, even though I'm such an optimist...but this poem is horrible. Try writing a poem while you're not drunk.

Answer 11

wow!! Touching poem kind of sad but it's pretty good.By the way i hope this is copy righted! good luck !! And keep your happy face.

Answer 12

ok ...

Answer 13

man its dark. i love poetry but i dont rly like this one no offense but im more of a happy person

Answer 14

you are right, it is not nice, it is dark

It shows you hopefully how dark and dismal your life was and now you are going to put it behind you and create a new poem that is more about happiness and courage.

~our words on paper will loosen the noxious devils from within, setting us free....

Answer 15

I really loved this poem as it is raw to the bone' with no pretty candy coating.I am really glad you have came above feeling like this' and you should write some more poems as your great,,,,Cya

Answer 16

Sooooo?

Not only is lame, not dark, but contradictory and senseless:

"For someone, other then me, love does not exist"

You meant you are the only one for who's love really exists?

" I don't care where I've been...etc"

"Pretending to be alive"

Why were you pretending, if you don't care?

Drunk or not, just rambling, meaningless rhyme

Answer 17

Suicide is selfish. They are too selfish to see that by ending their pain they are inflicting pain on others. I do agree that death takes its toll. I have had 4 family members die in the past 10 years so it isn't something I take lightly. Death doesn't end all pain. It creates pain where some may not have existed before. Love exists everywhere if you seek it out. If you have moved beyond this poem, that is something to be extremely proud of and people should commend you for that. Most never escape their darkness. I hope you are wise enough today to help those seek the help they need.

Answer 18

hmm... i didn't really get the point. uh the ryhming threw me off. and i got bored reading it. It's your work so i can't say anything.. you can either use my opinion or ignore it :D