Anybody willing to lend an opinion? =)?

Question

A Shack on Mary’s drive

On Mary’s Drive I dwell

Accompanied by few

To this day I’m the smallest shack

Mary’s drive has ever knew

Surrounding me are houses

Much bigger, much more strong

Their walls are covered in hard red brick

Material for which I long

They were shacks once long ago

This fact I know as true

Yet unlike me made out of tree

Received they materials new

Within those brick lined walls

Lies a group of their own breed

Families known as “the nation’s best”

Fill their homes with greed

A shack on Mary’s Drive

On Mary’s Drive I dwell

My walls are old and wooden

Far from an easy sell

With all these facts against me

I cannot help but grin

I’m much too old and tiny

Yet somehow I still win

Look past my broken hinges

Look through my window small

Deep within me, a group of three

They’ve close to nothing at all

As they look upon their neighbors

I look upon mine

We may not have those hard red bricks

But we’ll remain just fine

What we possess is FAMILY

And yes that is a wealth

We’ll stick together through the rain

Through sickness and through health

-ME- <33333

Answer 1

I admire not only your poem but also you as a person. The way you think and your simplicity like in the words that you use in your poem is awesome. Congrats, write some more!

Answer 2

liked it... kind of confusing

Answer 3

i&#039;m sorry, i couldn&#039;t get through it. the end rhyme is killing me slowly. it&#039;s better than most of the stuff people post on here. but i can&#039;t stand the end rhyme.

Answer 4

Wow thats GREAT!

i wouldn&#039;t change anything really! =)

keep up the great work!

Answer 5

I actually liked it.

Answer 6

I think the idea you have and the message you are trying to give with this poem is good, but I think it needs a little work. Some parts of it are like a limerick (that type of poetry that you kind of read in a sing-song way where you&#039;re like bobbing your head) but other parts aren&#039;t so it doesn&#039;t read very fluently.