Can I ask for your opinion?

Question

From dust that remains after it all

She rose, little black n white rose

Velvet petals and razors instead of thorns

To dine with night in their hunger

To feed with dreams and merciless cries

Tempting and louring passenger’s eyes

You can’t always get what you want

She carries memories, the ocean ripples

She carries bags of tears and turmoil

She wears it proudly in this life, in this night

Who says joy is only melting under the Sun

You can’t always get what you want

She shines, she mesmerizes

Daring to touch

Lighthouse in the darkness

For lusting souls to gather around

Cause today they don’t understand her sorrow

Maybe they will tomorrow

She’s burning

That’s all

She’s burning

And tonight

She’s illuminating

Her own precipice

You can’t always get what you want

Never to lie, never to deceit

Just a bit

Never to hate, never to resent

Just a bit

Never to ask, never to force

Just a bit

Never to envy, never to spite

Just a bit

Just a bit

Just a bit, so that you can

Forever be sorry

Answer 1

Wow, that is a really deep and complicated poem. I absolutely love it. Do not change anything in it. I cannot wait to see that published someday.

Answer 2

Wow, I really like it. I feel a power comming from your words, impaling on to me. I suggest you continue to write because you ahve a nice talent.

I would love to here more of your poems so i'm adding you as a contact :)

Answer 3

dear, this is amazing. I almost wanted to cry, but i'm kinda concerned about it getting stolen. Its a great poem, so some fagbag sooner or later is gonna want to steal it. watch out, but keep writing!

=]

Answer 4

i think it's a fine poem.

i might be wrong...but maybe it's about self control or else face the negative consequences? that's what it kind of feels like to me...

Answer 5

Has the world gone mad? Placing some words into a pot and stirring them before taking them out and throwing them together is not the way to write a poem. (Well, that's the impression it gives.) Absolute pretentious mince!

Answer 6

wow your so great at writing poems/showing emotions. keep it up. you should keep a book or make them into a book. (agrees with the 1st person)

Answer 7

It really is good!  You should have it published before someone rips you off.  You are a great poet, so don't question it,  just embrace your talent!