Do you like my song??????

Question

Hi i need help with the beginning and ending here is the song

Hollywood

(Courus)

I said we want to go to Hollywood

To see the fancy streets

To have our name on the walk of fame

I ain't complaining yeah yeah

We want to be in Hollywood

Cause' Hollywood is #1

(Courus)

I know were undiscovered

But, we will be

W hen we go to Hollywood

And be on TV

P.S.

Thats all i got i need help what should i put at the beginning and end?

There are going to be 3 or 4 people singing it

We are young too

And i wrote the song

Answer 1

Well I think the two choruses are nice... However, the

"I ain't complaining yeah yeah

We want to be in Hollywood

Cause' Hollywood is #1" sounds awkward to me, like its out of rhyme...

Best thing to do is to brainstorm... think about what you really want to say and the song has to have some story... Say you're a lonely kid and you have this dream, you have what it takes and more than that, it should take rising up and being bold to make the dream come true sort...

And of course, it'll go good with a vivacious tune...

Good luck!

Answer 2

Awesome

Answer 3

the lyrics are fantastic but unfortunatley no one can answer this question truthfuly and fully without the tune. without it the song is just not complete.

as for the song... GREAT!!!

KEEP ON WRITING AND MAYBE YOU WILL BE WALKING THE STREETS OF FAME IN HOLLYWOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!