Engrish Translation?

Question

Is this the right Engrish for "Kaiba Corporation Virtual Duel System?"

海馬コーポレイションバーチャルデュエルシステム

Note: The 海馬 (Kaiba) is only written in Kanji, and that's all that needs to be written.

Answer 1

You need a dash (nobasu) after the レ in corporation.

Duel should be デュアル.

Also, sometimes to make the katakana easier to read, we use the ・, so

海馬コーポレーイション・バーチャル・デュエル・システム

But it depends a lot on your preference.